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Guns firing above his head,
Eyes glance down to his left,
Partner gone and his best friend died.
His heart wants to stay and mourn,
His head tells him to ‘move on soldier!’
One last look, his partners’ eyes stare blankly,
He remembers the last words he said,
‘I miss my girl, tell her that will you?’

Blood runs thick on the sand,
It will never be free of the sins again,
The horror the sun saw that day,
Can never be undone,
Thousands dead, millions so hurt,
Many, many more lost someone they loved.

No one from yesterday has survived to live today,
Only one, he is alone, his rank so low,
If he returns, he’ll be a hero, until then, he is forgotten,
Lost in the countless bodies of innocent deaths,
His finger on the trigger, scared now, afraid,
A child, no more than five, runs in front of him,
Her eyes streaming, she is an orphan, a loner,
The one and only survivor of her family.

His finger slips.

The bullet races through the air, but he was scared.

He missed.

It missed her by few centimetres,
Made his heart break to see the fear in her eyes,
As she turned to look at him, her body gave out,
She fell, so quietly, and was now so pale she,
Could be mistaken for being dead,
He picked her up, light as a feather, and carried her,
All the way back to the camp, but he was the only survivor.

They would die that night,
Both together.

His own country,
Killed him and this child,
No more than five.

Hi died for his country.

No more.

No less.
ok, i got challenged by relativestranger to write a war poem- i have never done one of this genre ever before so forgive me if it sucks! erm... yeah.... not sure about it...... comment, critique and HELP!!! =P
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ShardsoBrokenglass Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010  Student General Artist
i loved that it was a story most of the war poems i heard jut desribed how it is this one was great
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irishhellgirl Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2010
Am glad you like it
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TacoKing1013 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2010  Professional Interface Designer
loving this one - very good job!!
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irishhellgirl Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2010
thank you :)
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Zedereka Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2009
Should do more of these in my opinion.
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irishhellgirl Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2009
Thank you very much. I will do at some point, gotten a lot more involved in the military since the days of writing this
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SGTAlan-Barrows Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2008
I get but at the same time I dont. But please dont explain, It'll hit me eventually.
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irishhellgirl Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2009
Any luck yet?
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Libri-Animus Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2008
this is really good...it has meaning
damn how come you geta load of comments on yours but not on mine???
please read mine and comment!!
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irishhellgirl Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2008
I will do dear (: I used to be a lot more active in this community than I have been, you comment on others and it will reflect back on you (:
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